September Blog Chain

Participants and posts:
orion_mk3 – (link to this month’s post)
BigWords – (link to this month’s post)
robeiae – (link to this month’s post)
pezie – (link to this month’s post)
Ralph Pines – (link to this month’s post)
AbielleRose – YOU ARE HERE
Darkshore – (link to this month’s post)
dolores haze – (link to this month’s post)
Alynza – (link to this month’s post)
pyrosama – (link to this month’s post)
xcomplex – (link to this month’s post)
lufftocraft – (link to this month’s post)
Cath – (link to this month’s post)

Alison twisted the large, pear-shaped diamond around and around her finger. She knew the the doe-eyed girl- who was eyeing her between bites of pie- was her half-sister. The question was, did the girl know what she was getting herself into coming here? The last thing she needed tonight was someone to babysit.

The pager in her pocketbook began buzzing. That was the signal. She needed to get out of there now.

“Whe- Where are you going?” Ellie said through a mouthful of pie. She had been trying to work up the courage to do this for so long. It couldn’t end like this.

“Listen, there will be time for this later. Much later. Right now you need to listen to me. Pay your bill and get your ass as far away from here as you can. Don’t follow me and don’t linger.”

Allison sat a ten dollar bill down on the counter, adjusted her skirt and walked casually to the ladies room. Ellie noticed several men, including the one she had been sitting next to, watch her as she disappeared behind the creaky-hinged door.

All she could think about while she paid her bill and stood to leave was that Allison knew who she was. Her sister knew her.

Ellie smiled to herself and turned to leave. Directly behind her a tall man with slick black hair stood holding a gun pointed towards the floor. Another man, also holding a gun, walked past the counter and kicked the ladies’ room door open with his foot.

“She ain’t in here, boss.” He shouted in a thick Jersey accent.

The guy standing behind Ellie glared at her. “She told you something just before she disappeared. What did she say?”

Ellie stuttered. “I- I don’t know.”

He laughed and grabbed her arm. “Oh yes you do, doll, and you’re going to tell us everything.”

The man led Ellie out of the diner and into a sleek black town car sitting just around the corner, the gun pointing at her back.


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15 Responses to September Blog Chain

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  2. Poor Ellie. She thought she was just going to get some pie and meet her sister and now this. What a day!

    Nice job :).

  3. ralfast says:

    The plot thickens. 🙂

  4. Personally, I’ve always wanted a diamond-shaped pear…

    Nice job, but the pager may be a bit anachronistic.

  5. Diane Dooley says:

    She abandoned her little sister to the bad guys? I like it *grin*

  6. This is definitely fast paced! 🙂

    What to do? What to d?!

    Nice job guys!

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  10. Dale Long says:

    So far there have been two different time periods for the same story and your piece blends them seemlessly. Same language and mannerisims accompianied by modern technology.

    Great job!

  11. Alynza says:

    Nice! Hmm, it gets more and more interesting. 🙂

  12. Alison Luff says:

    So much fun is so quick a scene! 🙂

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  14. Cath Smith says:

    Placing this right in the streets of New York. Fabulous.

  15. alexp01 says:

    Nice job, blending together what were conceived as two different interpretations. In addition to sky pirates, my character now gets to deal with the consequences of Mr. H. G. Durant’s dalliances! I might just wind up writing that detail into her backstory…

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